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Jun

Roller Coaster Susan — Gobblers & Masticadores – Flash Fiction

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Roller Coaster Susan, a woman with a passion for rides and thrills.

There’s no roller coaster that can intimidate her.

She rides like a queen and is known for her skill.

It takes a lot of heart to scare oneself to the limit.

But what happens when she pushes herself to the brink?

Read ahead and click the blue link to find out. Thanks!

There she comes! Get out of her way! Look at those shoes and that floral jumpsuit. They say she’s never ridden a roller coaster without it. She approaches the line twirling her hair, people part like the sea that obeyed Moses. Her name’s Susan and she knows where she’s going. Right to […]

Roller Coaster Susan — Gobblers & Masticadores


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25 Comments

  • Mike U. says:

    What a ride this was! I know there are people who view thrill-seeking as a religion of sorts, and Susan sure seemed to be one of them. I’ve only been on a couple of rollercoasters and, while they were thrilling, I decided I wasn’t going to ever have to worry about becoming an addict. 😀 Nicely done, Terveen. 🙂

    • Terveen Gill says:

      I agree, Mike. For some it’s like devotion, a sacred task that must be accomplished to the best of their abilities. I can’t be so serious about such things, but I Iove a good roller coaster ride. It’s so fulfilling and makes you scream out all your stress and worries. I’d love to scream otherwise but that might make me look crazy. Lol. Thanks so much for your sharing. I always appreciate it. 🙂

  • A great share!!!
    enjoyed reading it.
    There’s a difference in translation in spanish and english.

  • brittabenson says:

    I hope Roller Coaster Susan has a great time in heaven… or wherever she went to… Not sure where the better rides would be? If she remembers the rides from other lifetimes, then she may be on quite a journey! Great story, Terveen. I can always trust you to come up with a very unusual character.

    • Terveen Gill says:

      And I promise to keep that trust in place, Britta. What’s a story or a poem without some weird factor? Can’t have too much sane or proper writing. That’ll just brand us writers as boring along with all the other unusual traits. Haha. And Susan is somewhere, hopefully in a roller coaster. Thanks always for your lovely, witty comments. I can’t shut up after reading them. Oh well… 🙂

  • davydwriter says:

    I always knew these things were dangerous, Terveen. That is why I always volunteer to stand and hold the coats. At least, Susan went with a smile on her face (probably!). You get so much into your short stories. Great as always.

    • Terveen Gill says:

      Haha! I agree that two feet on the ground seem like a safer and saner choice. Adventure doesn’t have to be so nauseous and dangerous. I hope Susan enjoyed her last ride (on Earth). I appreciate your reflections, Davy. Thank you so much. 🙂

  • Cassa Bassa says:

    Ended in glory, not bad Susan! Ride on!!!

  • Great story but oof what an ending… After so many rides I can imagine it’s gonna be enough one day; I always need a break even after going on 1 coaster. And “giving her a temporary facelift” 😂 Really made me chuckle!

    • Terveen Gill says:

      Haha! Thanks so much! I suppose every story is incomplete without a dash of humor. And roller coasters are definitely stress inflictors. One ride does seem more than enough. Those who dare to exceed that might face the consequences. 🙂

  • Jeff Flesch says:

    Awesome write, Terveen. It brought back some old memories and adrenaline producing moments! 😊

  • haoyando says:

    What a surprise ending. I really admire those people who enjoy roller coasters since I can’t do it myself. I tried once or twice and gave it up since it was too scary. And I’ve learned that some people would have a heart attack when playing a competitive chess game or even watching a thriller movie. Still, it is a good way to die. I mean I’d rather die while doing something I love. So it is a worthy death after all.

    • Terveen Gill says:

      Couldn’t agree more with you. Doing something that gives one happiness is the way to be. And if it eventually takes your life, I guess it is a worthy death. Roller coasters are scary but I really love the thrill and adventure. Yes, it’s definitely crazy. Thank you for your sharing. 🙂

  • equinoxio21 says:

    Nice. Do you like Stephen King?

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