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Hilda is a woman who is often swept away by her daydreams.
There’s not much incentive to keep her mind in the real world.
But what happens when a vision makes her cross the line of imagination?
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She was a hopeless daydreamer. The kinds who could stare into space and build a palace from nothing. Imagining herself somewhere better, adding worth to her below average character, visualizing the man who would fight the world to gain her. ‘Hilda! Are you crazy?! Seriously?!’ The biting words brought her back to the corner of […]
He Would Come from the Waters by Terveen Gill — Gobblers & Masticadores
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I loved the surreal feel to this one. The whole story had a dream-like quality, as though Hilda were just floating through life. I pictured Danny DeVito as the boss (if you’ve ever seen “It’s Always Sunny in Philadelphia,” you’ll know what I mean). Poor Hilda, though… Hopefully she finally met her dreamy guy in the afterlife…or the ER. 🙂 This is another classic Terveen Gill story. So fun to read. 🙂
Thanks so much, Mike. You’re right…Danny would definitely fit the bill. I can imagine the scene so clearly. I sometimes wonder whether someone’s life could be so unpleasing that they push their minds to the realm of imagination forever. That would be sad but also so magical. I hope Hilda makes it far enough to actually see one of her daydreams come true (here, there, or anywhere). 🙂
The siren’s song on dry land. Quite the twist! Well done! 🙂
Oohhh! That’s so spooky too. I guess the mind is a danger in itself. Beware…. Thanks so much. 🙂
A perfect film noir comedy! ❤
It does have that feel to it, David. Poor Hilda and that dark vibe. Thanks so much. 🙂
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a stunning piece of writing; great characterisation, narrative drive, comedic touches, and that tragic ending; how I hate Mr, Tansen
Some people live off the misery of others, John. I hope Hilda is in a better place where her daydreams may actually see the light of day. Thank you so much. 🙂
they do indeed, Terveen ; a moving piece —
An awesome write, Terveen. Reality is often different from that which we perceive, isn’t it. Wonderful read. 😊
Thank you so much, Jeff. Yes, it is often nothing close to what we wish it would be. But that’s the bittersweet charm of life. 🙂
I loved this story about Hilda, daydreaming… He would come from the waters… I could picture the scene, Hilda, emptying the bucket over her head, walking outside to ‘meet’ the man of her dreams. I love your condensed drama. It’s all there and yet, you manage to leave enough to the reader for them to be fully engaged. This is so well written, Terveen. As per usual, a pleasure to read.
Hi Britta. I’m guessing this is you. I had to throw in that bucket dumping over the head…sends the message loud and clear…daydreams aren’t to be taken lightly. If I could count how many times I get lost in my imagination, I’d be at a loss of specifying a concrete figure. So let’s just pretend that I’m saner than Hilda and keep myself in check. haha. Thank you for appreciating the story, craziness and all. 🙂
Oh, what a surprise. Poor girl. I hope she’s OK. And yes, everybody thinks she’s dead since she can’t be seen. Then she emerges from under the car, unscathed and intact. Everybody thinks it’s a miracle and calls her Miss Miracle. She becomes an internet sensation and goes on national TV. Finally she meets her dream guy. LOL. This is very unlikely.
Haha! I love this continuation, Haoyan. I think we need to collaborate on a story. I’ll be the dark and you be the light. Your part of the story makes me really happy for Hilda. She does deserve it. Thank you so much! 🙂
Her fantasy saved her from the abuse, but eventually also drove her her to death. What a fine line!
She took a chance and probably without any regrets. Such can be the harshness of life. Thank you. 🙂
Some truth to that.